Second Animatic & Mid-review

So in my second animatic, have coloured in the girl characters that are being portrayed as foreign or "different". I have also extended the ending, so that it is not so quick. I have had many problems with the story at the moment, in that what i am trying to portray is not getting through. When i view the animatic, it seems so clear to me as it was a personal experience, but i must make myself objective, that way the story will be more clearer. During the mid-review, it was suggested that some scenes were unclear and looked like flashbacks. Also, i think that sound really must be added to the animatic , so that it is clearer, as sound may help me portray the concept better.
The same tutor that had suggested in my previous project that the characters should eat each other, had suggested that the main character in this one should either have a gun or rusty lawn mower, to get revenge on the other girls. XD