Tutorial

So I've had two tutorials since the last time i blogged. I also felt like i had a problem with the end of the narrative. To sum up my story; it would start off with a couple of girls playing in the playground. They're huddled up, so you can see what they're doing, but the bell rings and recess is over and you see that they've been playing with a toy/puppet. the puppet is actually the main character and is actually a girl. so the concept is that when she is with the other girls she changes into a puppet. This was influenced by the anime The Wallflower , as Sunako is portrayed as a sweet chibi character when she is herself, when there are serious emotions she would transform into the usual anime characters. In my story the other girls play with the main character constantly and i was planning to portray it as if she was being used. To conclude it, a new student would enter and the other girls would loose interest in the main character. The main character would feel relieved and it would end, however i felt that this ending was very weak. So after a couple of sleepless nights, i eventually came up with the idea that the main character would 'save' the new girl from being in the same position. Though it may change later.

After the second tutorial it was suggested that the puppet concept is fictional and is a little too similar to my previous animation 'Chains dont hold me Down'.
The problem with my previous film was that not alot of people understood the narrative. So at the tutorial it was suggested that i should stick with a simpler narrative, that way i would not be in the same position as i was in my previous film, as that was where it fell down in marks.